I tuck in my wings and smile,
I close my eyes and see into your eyes.
I take in my last breathe of solitude,
your scent is filling my soul.
I clench my fists tight,
missing your touch.
I spread my arms wide,
my heart smiles, as my eyes cry.
leaping off the edge,
towards the end my time.
speeding towards the light,
i see you waiting for me on the other side.
I reach out and feel your touch,
gently i draw you closer.
Opening my eyes to your smile,
Im glad to be by your side.
4 comments:
u knw which changes i'd hv made if i were u. lol. - feels like the meanest comment tho.
sowwie. i'll comment more nicely next time. *wink wink*
lol......
i appreciate criticism =D
specially from another poet
ohh...really touchyyy...
though the subject of the poem..is v.senstitive...
Indeed it is.......
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